The Submarine Race by Sophie

Second place winner in our elementary age category for our writing provoke, Mad Libs Reversed


On October sixteenth was the annual submarine race where five people have a race in their submarines. My dad was going to race in the race. We were in Hazleton, Pennsylvania and the race was in Scranton, Pennsylvania.

When we got there, they had a stand with a sign that said in big Hot Pink letters: “STRAWBERRY LEMONADE FOR SALE FOR RACERS AND THEIR FAMILIES.”

Then, we saw a big red and yellow tent that said “CIRCUS.” And me and my sister Annabelle begged, “Pleeeeeease can we go, pleeeeeeeeeease! Pretty pretty pretty please with a cherry on top and whipped cream and sugar!”

“Okay, I don’t see why not,” said our dad.

We saw an elephant lifting a grown-up giraffe on its back!!! We watched with our strawberry lemonades till it was time for our dad to race.

The last act we saw was a famous singer and his name is Jon Bon Jovi and he sang one of his songs called “Livin’ on a Prayer.” (If you want to listen to it, you can find it on YouTube or buy your family a copy of that song.)

“Ohhhhhhh, we’re half way there, ohoh livin’ on a prayer, take my hand we’ll make it I swear,” he sang fairly loud.

And while he sang, animals (Porcupines, Snakes, Elephants, Giraffes, Peacocks, Tigers, Cats, Dogs, Sheep, Camels, Leopards, Lions, Horses, Gorillas, Turkeys, Parrots, Foxes, Bulls, Deer, Swans, Zebras and Monkeys) acted really silly (especially the Monkeys). The animals were kind of singing with Bon Jovi.

It was now time for my dad to race! We cheered “Come on daddy, you can do it, let’s get tough!” and “Go! Go! Fight! Fight! Win! Win! Let’s go daddy!” In a couple of minutes, we saw our dad’s submarine. He had won!!!

“Yay daddy! You did it! You won the submarine race!” We gave him a BIG (And I mean BIG folks) kiss.💋

The End


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